I feel it. All 3 got flow, no doubt. Given the tone of the chorus I would go a different route though. Either a female, on one end, or a brotha like Nate Dogg on the other. There needs to be an understated power to it. It's soft to me, as is. No offense. Think Nate Doggs hook on "These Days". There is soul to it, but there is an underlying tone of "this is real street shit" as well.
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